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It really is a wonderful fic!
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Thank you!
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Just updated my fanfic 'Maelstrom' with chapter 6 -
Comments and reviews always appreciated, thanks.
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Really good Teejay, I could picture them both!
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Thanks, Clare!
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When I woke up yesterday morning I had this idea for a missing scene from TEH in my head. It wanted to be written so here you are. Hope you like it.
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I like that Susi!
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Thank you, clare.
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SusiGo wrote:
When I woke up yesterday morning I had this idea for a missing scene from TEH in my head. It wanted to be written so here you are. Hope you like it.
That's a good gap-filler, I always wondered what happened between the kebab place and the Look-I'm-Back! montage.
Can I make a more technical suggestion, though? This may just be a me thing, but I personally hate it when people don't put full line breaks in between paragraphs and pieces of dialogue. Seeing a fic posted like that instantly turns me off, and usually I don't make an effort to read it. What I did with yours is copy & paste it into Word, batch-fix the paragraph issues, and then I read it after I had formatted it. It would also help if you put separators between scenes, like a horizontal line or a few asterisks, etc. Makes it so much easier to read.
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Thanks for your comment. Personally I have no problem in reading the text and the three scenes are separated from each other. In case anyone else feels turned off, please tell me.
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Hm, but there actually are full line breaks in between the scenes......?
I know what you mean, but I'm fine with this one.
And very well written, I like it very much.
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Thank you, Mattlocked.
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Brilliant, Susi. Sherlock and Mycroft are absolutely in character, and I love how much is said between the brothers - and how much is left unsaid on purpose.
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Thank you so much, Schmiezi.
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Yes - the injuries on Sherlock's back - as he didn't complain I almost forgot about them. Your fic reminded me of how painful John's attack in the restaurant must have been for him.
Well done, Susi! Yes, that's quite probable to have happened after John and Mary left.
And btw I didn't have any difficulties in reading it...
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Mattlocked wrote:
Hm, but there actually are full line breaks in between the scenes......?
I know what you mean, but I'm fine with this one.
Well, in that case I guess I mean double line breaks. Looks like it's just a me-thing, then.
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tobeornot221b wrote:
Yes - the injuries on Sherlock's back - as he didn't complain I almost forgot about them. Your fic reminded me of how painful John's attack in the restaurant must have been for him.
Well done, Susi! Yes, that's quite probable to have happened after John and Mary left.
And btw I didn't have any difficulties in reading it...
Thank you, Ani. Some time ago someone pointed out the back injuries on tumblr. And then it popped up in my mind yesterday and the story was there.
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I've read a few fanfics that mentioned it as well, but I wonder just how much time passed between Serbia and the shaving scene. Everything seems to suggest that it wasn't more than a day or two, but it could have been longer. I also think Sherlock might have sustained a cracked rib or two--at the very least deep bruising. I mean, the guy hit him in the ribcage with an iron pipe... John wrangling him around must have been quite painful.
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Yes, I think they got him to London quickly as Mycroft needed him there. The injuries are not healed as we clearly see in the shaving scene. But it is in character for Sherlock not to let it show in his encounter with John.
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Yes, totally agree. And you're right, Mycroft would have wanted him in London soon. Kinda forgot about that. Sherlock's groan certainly gives away that he's in pain, so let's assume he's got all those cuts on his back and a bruised and battered ribcage.